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Chapter 2A类动态小作文首段改写类动态小作文首段改写+概括段写概括段写作作 by William复习答疑环节Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe bar chart below gives information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words12345678910 In 2002,postgraduates were those having greatest level of ownership,with 78%of them possessing their own computers.The figure for graduates was 8%lower,at 70%.During the next 8 years,these two figures both experienced an obvious increase to 95%and 90%respectively.Also more likely to own computers were those with an unfinished college education.Yet the increment was a little more significant:from 55%to 85%.The figure for High school graduates in 2010 was lower than this,at 67%,but it was likewise 30%higher than its 2002 figure of 37%.The lowest level in both years was found among those who did not finish high school,although it almost trebled(15%-42%).Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 wordsOutline for Todays ClassSection 1 数据多的双动图写作Section 2 改写段基本功综述Section 3 双动图改写段Section 4 多动图改写段Section 5 双动图概括段Section 6 多动图概括段Section 1数据多的双动图的写作方法数据多的双动图的写作方法The two tables contain sales data for Fairtrade coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004,in five nations of Europe.The first table shows low-level coffee sales increasing in all five countries,albeit to widely varying degrees.In two places sales increased by the same small amount:1.8-2 million euros in Denmark,and 0.8-1 million in Sweden.The increment was slightly larger in Belgium,from 1-1.7 million euros.Meanwhile,in Switzerland sales doubled from 3-6 million euros.Finally,in the UK there was an enormous increase,from 1.5-20 million euros.In the second table,it is Switzerland which stands out as buying far more Fairtrade bananas than the other four countries.Swiss sales figures jumped from 15-47 million euros across these five years,while in the UK and Belgium sales only grew from 1-5.5 and from 0.6-4 million euros respectively.Sweden and Denmark showed a different pattern,with falls in banana sales from 1.8-1 and 2-0.9 million euros.Comparing the 2 tables,it is clear that,in 1999,Fairtrade coffee sales ranged from 0.8-3 million euros in these 5 countries,while banana sales also clustered between 0.6 and 2 million euros,with Switzerland the outlier at a huge 15 million euros.By 2004,except for Sweden and Denmark which recorded drops in banana sales,sales figures for both products had risen across the board,albeit to widely varying degrees.1-6Section 2改写段基本功综述改写段基本功综述改写段的常见改写方向改写段的常见改写方向词/短语的维度1.同义词替换2.词性转换句子的维度1.名词短语宾语从句2.常见框架套用信息的完善1.分组信息的完善改写段的改写原则改写段的改写原则1.内容上忠于题目原文的原始要点。2.语言上在满足不出词汇、语法、逻辑错误的前提下尽量和原句不一样。改写段的常见改写方向改写段的常见改写方向词/短语的维度1.同义词替换2.词性转换句子的维度1.名词短语宾语从句2.常见框架套用信息的完善1.分组信息的完善Section 2双动图改写段套路汇总双动图改写段套路汇总改写段写法上的研究对象改写段写法上的研究对象1.词的变化:1.1图表名称是否需要做变化 1.2数据称呼上的变化 1.3动词的变化 1.4其他同义词替换 1.5词性的替换2.数据及数据分组信息的补充3.双动图表达思维的变化+句子框架的变化1.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架1：by comparing the data in and,the chart illustrates how and how much had changed during this period1-11.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架1(动静结合类框架)：by comparing the data in and,the chart illustrates how and how much had changed during this periodBy comparing the data in 1990 and 2010,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of people giving money to charity had changed in 5 different age groups in the UK during this period.1-21.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架1：by comparing the data in and,the chart illustrates how and how much had changed during this period题库1-1 By comparing the data in 1990 and 2010,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of people giving money to charity had changed in 5 different age groups in the UK during this period.题库1-2 By comparing the data before and after the introduction of extra lanes,the chart illustrates how and how much the number of traffic accidents had changed in 5 different motorways(M1-M5)during this period.双动图双动图(饼图饼图)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words1.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架1：by comparing the data in and,the chart illustrates how and how much had changed during this period题库1-1 By comparing the data in 1990 and 2010,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of people giving money to charity had changed in 5 different age groups in the UK during this period.题库1-2 By comparing the data before and after the introduction of extra lanes,the chart illustrates how and how much the number of traffic accidents had changed in 5 different motorways(M1-M5)during this period.题库1-3 By comparing the data in 2003 and 2013,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of 4 different retail sectors had changed in the composition of total online shopping sales in New Zealand during this period.1.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架2(静态框架)：Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the in in and.题库1-1 Available in the chart are the results of a UK national survey regarding the percentage of people giving money to charity in 5 different age groups in 1990 and 2010.1-21.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架2(静态框架)：Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the in in and.题库1-1 Available in the chart are the results of a UK national survey regarding the percentage of people giving money to charity in 5 different age groups in 1990 and 2010.题库1-2 Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the number of accidents in every kilometer of 5 different motorways(M1-M5)in Bridgewater before and after the introduction of extra lanes.双动图双动图(饼图饼图)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words1.双动双动图常见框架图常见框架 框架2(静态框架)：Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the in in and.题库1-1 Available in the chart are the results of a UK national survey regarding the percentage of people giving money to charity in 5 different age groups in 1990 and 2010.题库1-2 Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the number of accidents in every kilometer of 5 different motorways(M1-M5)in Bridgewater before and after the introduction of extra lanes.题库1-3 Available in the chart are the results of a survey in New Zealand regarding the composition of online shopping sales comprising 4 retail sectors in 2003 and 2013.Available in the chart are the results of a survey in New Zealand regarding the percentage of 4 different retail sectors in online shopping sales in 2003 and 2013.1.词的变化词的变化1.1 图表名称的改写与否表格Table柱状图Bar/column chart饼图Pie chart线图Line/curve graph1.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化思路1型:1.data例如 the data regarding(关于);data with respect to;data concerning 也有一些稍特殊的:sales data2.Information regarding ;information with respect to 这类变化一般使用在双动图改写段思路1中!1-11.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化例题:题库1-1Data with respect to charity donations in different age groups Data regarding charity donations Information regarding charity donations Information with respect to the people giving money to charity1-21.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化练习:题库1-2Data with respect to the road security and traffic accidents on 5 different motorwaysData regarding the accidents happening Information regarding the accidents happening Information with respect to the accidents happening 1.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化思路2型:1.Percentage=proportion=the level of(各组各自百分之百)=the composition of(各组总和百分之百)；1-11.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化例题1:题库1-1 The percentage of people giving money to charity=The proportion of people giving money to charity=the level of charity participation（因为题目每个组的总数各是100%）双动图双动图(饼图饼图)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words1.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化例题2:题库1-4 The percentage of 4 sectors=the proportion of 4 sectors=the composition of online sales为什么不是the percentage of online shopping sales？1.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化例题2:题库1-4 The percentage of 4 sectors=the proportion of 4 sectors=the composition of online sales为什么不是the percentage of online shopping sales？因为这道题是4个sectors 加起来100%Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe bar chart below gives information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words123456789101.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化练习1:题库1-3 The percentage of computer owners=the proportion of computer owners=the level of computer ownership多动图多动图(柱状图柱状图)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The bar chart gives information about changing shares of total world production in Asia,Europe and the rest of the world between 1840 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words1.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化练习2:题库2-7 The percentage of 3 different regions=the proportion of 3 different regions=the composition of world production1.词的变化词的变化1.2 数据称呼的变化思路2型:1.Percentage=proportion=the level of(各组各自百分之百)=the composition of(各组总和百分之百，但并不通用！)2.Number=figure=amount(后跟不可数)但请注意 number、figure、amount 本身可数所以单独说某一个数据的时候 应该写 the amount of 或者 a large amount of 等1.词的变化词的变化1.3 动词变化思路1型:Compare/contain/examine思路2型:Illustrate/demonstrate1.词的变化词的变化1.4 其他词汇的替换People giving money to charity =people donating money to charity=donors to charityThe popularity of=the preference forMen&women=male and female=the two genders。1.词的变化词的变化1.5 词性的变化最常见的一种：动词名词例题：题库1-2Following the introduction of extra lanes 1.词的变化词的变化1.5 词性的变化最常见的一种：动词名词例题：题库1-2Following the introduction of extra lanes Introduction=introduceFollowing=afterAfter introducing some extra lanes2.信息的补充信息的补充对题目数据的分组信息进行补全比如 题库1-1的By age range 我们看实际的图片发现是5个age ranges 所以在改写的时候可以写清楚是 in 5 age groups再比如 1-3 的by level of education 变成 in 5 education levels 1-22.信息的补充信息的补充题库1-2On busy roads=5 different motorways双动图双动图(饼图饼图)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this taskThe pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words2.信息的补充信息的补充题库1-4For retail sectors=4 different retail areas练习：题库1-5：Section 3多动图改写段套路2-42-141.三三时间点多动图常见框架时间点多动图常见框架 框架1(动静结合类框架)：by comparing the data in and,the chart illustrates how and how much had changed during this period框架2(静态框架)：Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the in in and.2-41.三三时间点多动图常见框架时间点多动图常见框架 题库2-4By comparing the data in 1962,1982 and 2002,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of immigrants from 5 different countries had changed in Australia during this period.Available in the chart are the results of an Australian national survey regarding the composition of Australian immigrants from 5 different countries in 3 separate years:1962,1982 and 2002.2-12来源：C8 T21.三时间点多动图常见框架三时间点多动图常见框架 题库2-12By comparing the data in 1981,1991 and 2001,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of 5 different types of spending had changed in a particular UK school during this period.Available in the chart are the results of a survey regarding the percentage of 5 different types of spending in a particular UK school in 3 separate years:1981,1991 and 2001.2-141.三时间点多动图常见框架三时间点多动图常见框架 题库2-14By comparing the data in 1990,1996 and 2000,the chart illustrates how and how much the percentage of 5 different types of spending had changed in a particular UK school during this period.Available in the chart are the results of a UK national survey regarding energy production by 5 different types of fuel in 3 separate years:1990,1996 and 2000.四个以上时间点多动图改写和双动图改写有区别？四个以上时间点多动图改写和双动图改写有区别？区别在于以下几点：多动图本身体现了变化的数据的更为细节的变化过程，而不在只是compare 一头一尾两个时间点的数据。这导致了以下思路上的变化：仍然可以用宾语从句，但是应该只用how 引导，因为更注重过程而不再注重变化的幅度。Compare 这个词不适合在时间点较多的多动图中用了，但是如果题目的时间点只有3个的话还是可以用的多动图的权威改写多动图的权威改写权威例句：C5 T1：The graph shows the increase in the ageing population in Japan,Sweden and the USA.C6 T1：The graph shows how the amount of water used worldwide changed between 1900 and 2000.C7 T2：The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef,lamb,chicken,and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.C8 T2：The charts show how much a UK school spent on different running costs in three separate years:1981,1991 and 2001.C9 T2：The chart shows the time spent by UK residents on different types of telephone calls between 1995 and 2002.OG T6：This graph illustrates how crime rates altered in Newport inner city during the period 2003-2012.多动多动图改写段思路图改写段思路1仍然可以参照双动图的方式写how 引导的,另可加入 general/detailed process of 短语 变成The chart illustrates a general/detailed process of how changed between and 2-2多动多动图改写段思路图改写段思路1答案：The curve graph illustrates the detailed process of how the rates of 3 types of crime had changed between 2003 and 2012.2-7多动多动图改写段思路图改写段思路1答案：The column chart illustrates the general process of how the proportions of 3 different regions had changed in world total production between 1840 and 2000.多动图改写段思路多动图改写段思路2框架:Available in the graph are the results of an annual/biennial/quadrennial survey（或者continuous survey in every years）regarding the changing between and 2-2多动图改写段思路多动图改写段思路2框架:Available in the graph are the results of an annual/biennial/quadrennial survey（或者continuous survey in every years）regarding the changing between and 题库2-2：Available in the graph are the results of an annual survey regarding the changing rates of 3 crimes in Newport city center between 2003 and 2013.2-6多动图改写段思路多动图改写段思路2框架:Available in the graph are the results of an annual/biennial/quadrennial survey（或者continuous survey in every years）regarding the changing between and 题库2-2：Available in the graph are the results of an annual survey regarding the changing rates of 3 crimes in Newport city center between 2003 and 2013.题库2-6:Available in the graph are the results of a continuous survey in every 40 years regarding the percentages of 3 different regions in total world production between 1840 and 2000.多动图改写段思路多动图改写段思路2框架:the chart examines/contains the .(但最好不要用compares，除非