四级写作 评分标准解读+批改报告.docx

本材料由超级课程表和智课网联合整理提供 四级写作 满分评分标准解读 CET作文题采用总体评分方法。从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体，作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容要通过语言来表达。要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而确切地表达思想，也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。 满分15分，根据考试大纲的评分标准，给出的最高的14分评分标准为： 14分：切题，表达思想清楚。语言通顺，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误； 解读： A. “切题，表达思想清楚”：所谓切题，最直观的理解就是“不跑题”，在四六级英语写作中，跑题是比较难的，因为题目会给出非常明确的观点选择或者命题场景。所谓表达思想清楚，尤其对于四六级写作中的给出两种观点，问你同意哪一个观点的时候，这个时候建议同学们要有清晰的观点倾向，即便你会对比两种观点各自的利弊，最终你清晰的preference是给考官非常重要的信息传递。 B. “语言通畅，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误”：这一条主要要求考生的语言的逻辑和语言的使用能力。在四六级写作中，虽然不像GRE GMAT这种高端逻辑写作对逻辑要求那么高，但是逻辑的通畅也是最基本的，而且只有逻辑通畅了，语言才是通畅的。但是英文作为“形合”语言，既注重“内容逻辑”也注重“形式逻辑”，例如必要的逻辑引导信号，firstly，secondly，whereas，on the other hand，all in all….都能引领读者和考官更加清晰的把握你的文章的起承转合。关于语言错误，建议大家还是要高标准严格要求自己，用最地道的书面英文进行写作，四六级写作还不是真正的文章写作，但是是非常好的过渡都GRE TOEFL、甚至论文写作的桥梁，培养自己书面化表达的严谨性和地道性。 2013年06月四级作文真实批改报告 题型：英语四级作文 题目：2013年06月英语四级作文 原文字数：164 批改时间：2013年08月22日 21：13 A young lady is 1teaching student study multiplication table in the classroom. Maybe, 2multiplication table too difficult to learn, suddenly, a girl speak up, 3No offense , but by the time we are in the job market , 4won not that stuff be outdated?” Just at that moment , the teacher also can not reply. Exactly as, the lassock said 5, stuff can change , why 6multiplication table do not outdated.   With 7the society of the development, everything is 8happening change. Even knowledge also 9sharpen the saw ,but still have some stuff can not outdated, for example , multiplication 10table .This is the basic of math. 11Just as ,one add one always equal to two, as broad as it is long.   We have to admit 12society is 13progress , certainly, so  14knowledge does. But some stuff 15won not outdated. We 16sole make take full advantage of these 17resource.   18Whatever society how to change , please remember 19these basic won 20not outdated. Only 21master these basic knowledge, we 22ability to get there. 错误归类分析： 单词合并错误： 1：批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：The phrase should be “teaching the multiplication table to the students”. 4: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It’s “won’t” here. 6: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It should be “can’t multiplication table be/get outdated?” 7: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It should be “the development of the society”. 8: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：You mean “changing”? 10: 批改解释：Incomprehensible text. 修改建议：It’s better to say “the multiplication table which is the basics of math”. 13: 批改解释：Incomprehensible text. 修改建议：Better to use “in progress” or “progressing”. 15: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It’s better to use “won’t get” or “will not get”. 18: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It should be “However the society develops,” 19: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：Better to use “the basics” here. “The basics of sth” means “the most important and necessary facts, skills, ideas, etc. from which other things develop”. 22: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It’s more reasonable to use “are able to get there”. 从句错误： 2: 批改解释：Clause deficiency. 修改建议：The clause is supposed to be “because the multiplication table is too difficult to learn,”. 标点错误： 3: 批改解释：Punctuation error. 修改建议：Add a quotation mark “” here. 连词错误： 5: 批改解释：Incorrect or missing conjunction. 修改建议：Add “since” here. 词义不明(INC)： 9: 批改解释：Incomprehensible text. 修改建议：Hard to understand you. Do you mean “is developing fast, but still have to be based on some basic skills”? 中式英语(CHI)： 11: 批改解释：Chinglish. 修改建议：Chinglish. 冠词错误： 12: 批改解释：Missing article. 修改建议：Insert “the” here. 词序不当： 14: 批改解释：Incorrect word order. 修改建议：Seems that it should be “is knowledge”, to go along well with “is in progress”. 选词错误： 16: 批改解释：Poor word selection. 修改建议：The word “sole” doesn’t make any sense here. Did you intend to type in the word “should”? 单复数错误： 17: 批改解释：Error in singular or plural form. 修改建议：“Resources” should be used here. 单词缺失： 20: 批改解释：A word is missing. 修改建议：Insert the word “get” here. 21: 批改解释：Words are missing here. 修改建议：Add several words here “after we”. 得分14.0分（满分30分） 切题 Response to the prompt 文章切题，阐说充分 response to the prompt with adequate explanation 文章结构 Organization 段落组织有序，衔接紧密 well-organized structure, clear and close transition as well 论点扩展和细节运用 Development and Details 段落内句与句连接顺畅，句式使用恰当，用词确切，得体，论证充分 coherent structure, appropriate word usage, adequate exampling 语法 Grammar 表达准确，简单句、复杂句使用流畅 accurate expression, advanced vocabulary with a high degree of accuracy 总评 A lot of effort is needed in ensuring the use of every word, the grammar of each and every sentence, and the use of punctuation marks. Remember to check it over to minimize the potential mistakes after you’re done with your writing of an essay. Don’t panic though. If you read this webpage, for good model sentences, you’ll find it not so difficult to write good sentences. The structure of the essay needs improving. Urgent for you to acquaint yourself with the structures of different categories of CET4 writing. Please refer to the webpage for the model structures of different categories of writings, and you can find similar articles anywhere on the internet, Don't be discouraged by the weaknesses of the essay I pointed out. As long as you work harder and be careful enough with details, you'll be an excellent writer. Trust me. 2013年06月四级作文真实批改报告 题型：英语四级作文 题目：2013年06月英语四级作文 原文字数：151 批改时间：2013年08月14日 11：23 1In the classroom, the teacher is showing the multplication table, but the students don't think it is necessary to learn     this kind basic skill because it would be outdated in the job market. 2However, I don't think this kind opinion is right. In fact, the basic skill will play important role in everyone's job.    3People are more practical than before, so they do everything to achieve the requriement of the job they want, such as language 4lever certificate, 5computor certificate and kinds of 6ability proof. It seems the job will be got by 7kinds of certificates not our ability. 8In fact, the bacic skill will be the key part in the career development. Without the     strong 9basic, the skyscrapers can't be 10finished. Thus I think 11basic skill is very important and we need to master the    12basic skill 13and we can 14run more far and higher in our future career development.  错误归类分析： 逻辑错误： 1：批改解释：Logic error. 修改建议：In the first paragraph, you should begin with a topic sentence, describing the general idea of the picture, like “The picture depicts what happens in a classroom meeting”. Then you can go on with some details, such as what the students are saying, and what the teacher is teaching. Pls refer to the final comment for more information about the logic structure of a writing. 2: 批改解释：Logic error. 修改建议：This sentence should be put in the third paragraph, stating your opinion on this issue. 3: 批改解释：Logic error. 修改建议：Your topic sentence for this paragraph is “students are getting more practical in choosing what they learn at schools”. Then, you’re supposed to several reasons behind this, or examples of their becoming practical in their study. But your essay seems illogic in this regard. 8: 批改解释：Logic error. 修改建议：The sentences following this sentence should be placed in a new paragraph, the third paragraph for presenting your view on this issue. 打字错误(TYP)： 4: 批改解释：Text input error. 修改建议：“level” is the correct spelling. Practice your typing skill. 拼写错误(SPL)： 5: 批改解释：Spelling error. 修改建议：“computer” is the right word. 中式英语(CHI)： 6: 批改解释：Chinglish. 修改建议：“proofs of your ability” will do here. 14: 批改解释：Chinglish. 修改建议：Just use “fare well” here. 单词缺失： 7: 批改解释：A word is missing here. 修改建议：“obtaining” is needed here. 选词错误： 9: 批改解释：Poor word selection. 修改建议：Do you mean “foundation”? 指代不清： 10: 批改解释：The meaning is vague. 修改建议：How about “built”? 可数名词错误： 11: 批改解释：Count noun error. 修改建议：It should be “basic skills”. It’s easy to avoid this kind of mistakes by just following the expressions in the directions. 12: 批改解释：Count noun error. 修改建议：We need another “basic skills” here. 连词错误： 13: 批改解释：Incorrect conjunction. 修改建议：You used two “and”s in this sentence. Divide this sentence into two or three sentences. 得分16.0分（满分30分） 切题 Response to the prompt 文章切题，阐说充分 response to the prompt with adequate explanation 文章结构 Organization 段落组织有序，衔接紧密 well-organized structure, clear and close transition as well 论点扩展和细节运用 Development and Details 段落内句与句连接顺畅，句式使用恰当，用词确切，得体，论证充分 coherent structure, appropriate word usage, adequate exampling 语法 Grammar 表达准确，简单句、复杂句使用流畅 accurate expression, advanced vocabulary with a high degree of accuracy 总评 Most of the sentences in this essay are well written. However, some other ones are not grammatical, even appearing to be Chinglish (you literally translate your Chinese ideas following the Chinese grammar). Suggest that you work harder to memorize good model sentences. Read this webpage, for good model sentences. This essay got a bad score for its ill constructed structure. Familiarize yourself with the structure of one essay before you actually sit down to write out it. Please refer to the webpage for the model structures of different categories of writings, and you can find similar articles anywhere on the Internet, 2012年06月四级作文真实批改报告 题型：英语四级作文 题目：2012年06月英语四级作文 原文字数：133 批改时间：2013年08月23日 16：10 1During the festival season ,many supermarkets 2show delicate packaging of products in order to attract massive consumers to purchase their goods.   There are several reasons for this problem. 3one of the main 4cause is that 5manufactures believe 6them could benefit from excessive 7packaging.so they could gain a great deal of money. 8Of course, it is because of government can\'t control such as this behaviour, the phenomenon of excessive packaging becomes more and more. In addition ,9vanity of consumers 10are also 11important.   In my opinion , 12Excessive packaging waste too 13much 14resoures and 15material ,and it 16bright serious environment pollution. 17we should carry out 18following tips. First of all 19, government could 20proclaim 21several of the law about excessive packaging. Next, consumers need to build correct 22aware. Finally, 23manufactures should take inexpensive packing material. 错误归类分析： 逻辑错误： 1: 批改解释：Logic error. 修改建议：There’s no topic sentence in this paragraph. It’s quite simple to make one by translating the first statement in the outline given in the directions. 单词合并错误： 2: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：Better to say “show off products with delicate packaging”. 7: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：It should be “packing, and”. 11: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：If I were you, I’ll write it as: “an important factor in excessive packaging”. 21: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：How about “several laws to curb excessive packaging”? 22: 批改解释：Error in word combination. 修改建议：Better to use “awareness about proper packaging”. 大小写错误： 3: 批改解释：Capitalization error. 修改建议：Use “One” here. 12: 批改解释：Capitalization error. 修改建议：Better to use “excessive” here. 17: 批改解释：Capitalization error. 修改建议：Better to use “We” with the capitalized initial here. 单复数错误： 4: 批改解释：Error in singular or plural form. 修改建议：“causes” should be used here. 15: 批改解释：Error in singular or plural form. 修改建议：“materials” should be used here. 拼写错误(SPL)： 5: 批改解释：Spelling error. 修改建议：“manufacturers” is the right word. 14: 批改解释：Spelling error. 修改建议：“resources” is the right word. 23: 批改解释：Spelling error. 修改建议：“manufacturers” is the right word. 选词错误： 6: 批改解释：Poor word selection. 修改建议：It should be “that they”. 10: 批改解释：Poor word selection. 修改建议：Grammatically “is” better to go with “vanity”. 13: 批改解释：Poor word selection. 修改建议：Here it should be “many”, since “resource” is a countable noun. 20: 批改解释：Poor word selection. 修改建议：Let’s use “introduce, pass, or legislate against”. 词义不明(INC)： 8: 批改解释：Incomprehensible text. 修改建议：I’ll rewrite this sentence, as “What’s more, because the government can’t bring this under control, the phenomenon of excessive packaging goes much wild.” 时态错误： 16: 批改解释：Tense error. 修改建议：It should be “brought about”. 单词缺失： 18: 批改解释：A word is missing. 修改建议：Insert “the” here. 冠词错误： 19: 批改解释：Incorrect use of the article. 修改建议：Add the definite article “the” here. 选词不错！ 9: 批改解释：Good word choice. 修改建议：Good word. 得分17.0分（满分30分） 切题 Response to the prompt 文章切题，阐说充分 response to the prompt with adequate explanation 文章结构 Organization 段落组织有序，衔接紧密 well-organized structure, clear and close transition as well 论点扩展和细节运用 Development and Details 段落内句与句连接顺畅，句式使用恰当，用词确切，得体，论证充分 coherent structure, appropriate word usage, adequate exampling 语法 Grammar 表达准确，简单句、复杂句使用流畅 accurate expression, advanced vocabulary with a high degree of accuracy 总评 A lot of effort is needed in ensuring the use of every word, the grammar of each and every sentence, and the use of punctuation marks. Remember to check it over to minimize the potential mistakes after you’re done with your writing of an essay. If you read this webpage, for good model sentences, you’ll find it not so difficult to write good sentences. The structure of the essay needs much improvement. Urgent for you to acquaint yourself with the structures of different categories of CET4 writing. Please refer to the webpage for the model structures of different categories of writings, and you can find similar articles anywhere on the Internet, Don't be discouraged by the weaknesses of the essay I pointed out. As long as you work harder and be careful enough with details, you'll be a good writer. 2013年06月四级作文真实批改报告 题型：英语四级作文 题目：2013年06月英语四级作文 原文字数：243 批改时间：2013年08月12日 22：33 With 1the improvement of our life, many people choose to eat outside rather than to cook by themselves. However, some people think that this phenomenon is not so good because we can be affected with some 2kinds of disease. For me, I think it is good for people to eat at home for it is more economical to cook by ourselves.   First of all, 3cook by ourselves is more economical. Generally speaking, you have to spend more than 30yuan for each meal eating outside. But if you cook at home, you can just spend 10yuan per person for each meal.   Secondly, it will be 4cleaner to eat at home than eating outside. 5No matter what kin