续写内容创造的原则——以2023年高考续写题为例.pdf

GUANG DONG JIAOYUGAO ZHONGI went to my teachers office after the award presentation.续写内容创造的原则本文讲述了作者上中学时，社会学老师邀请他参加一个写作比赛。英语写作对于他是困难和痛苦的，所以他不假思索就拒绝以2 0 2 3年高考续写题为例了。但是在老师的欣赏和鼓励下，作者同意进行尝试。在写作过程中，作者虽然很累，但是反复修改，没有放弃，坚持了下来。在作者最后完成写作时，感到很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了。广东省湛江市第二中学郭娟根据两个段首句：几周后，当我几乎记那个比赛，消息传来；在颁奖典礼后我去了老师办公室，可知第一段应该包含以下要点：（1）作者获奖；（2）颁奖相关信息；（3）提王初明教授指出读后续写的内容要创造，于是很多考生认及老师；第二段应该包含以下要点：（1）对老师的感激；为续写的内容可以根据自己的常识或生活经验进行大胆的创（2）从这件事当中获得的积极、正能量的人生感悟即文章结新，只要能够做到自圆其说，符合逻辑即可，其实不然。下面尾处的升华。那么，创造出续写内容应该遵循哪些原则呢？笔者以2 0 2 3年的高考读后续写为例，梳理总结续写内容创造一、逻辑“它洽”应遵循的原则，以助考生一臂之力。本文的逻辑“它洽”是指续写内容要和文章自身即作者2023年读后续写的试题如下：的逻辑，而不仅仅是续写者的个人逻辑相融洽，即续写内容When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked要符合逻辑“它洽”，而不仅仅是“自洽”。考生在构造续写me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not内容时很容易陷人自身的逻辑，根据自身的生活经验和常识love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English was only my来完成两段的续写，而忽视文章本身的逻辑，这样的续写内second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my容在考场上，尤其是高考的考场上拿到第五档的分数是非常teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the困难的，因此考生一定要注意续写内容的逻辑“它洽”，如Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one下面一位考生的考场作品：laughed harder than he did.A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there cameSo,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which Ithe news.I was so sad to learn that I lost the contest.A sense ofwas sure to fail?His reply:“Because I love your stories.If youresorrow flooded over me.I had worked so hard on the writing.Iwilling to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this.asked my sister to help me with it.More importantly,I alsoEncouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try.checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library andI chose Paul Reveres horse as my subject.Paul Revere was aeven read a few of them to finish the writing.My efforts were insilversmith（银匠)in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,vain.Thinking of that,tears clouded my eyes.But I decided to1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.ask my teacher for the reason why I failed in the contest.My story would come straight from the horses mouth.Not a brilliantI went to my teachers office after the award presentation.Whenidea,but funny;and unlikely to be anyone elses choice.I walked into my teachers office,he was busy with something else.What did the horse think,as he sped through the night?Did he“Sorry to interrupt you,my dear teacher.Can you tell me why myget tired?Have doubts?Did he want to quit?I sympathizedwriting didnt get any reward?I said in very miserable tone.“Youimmediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,likemade some grammar mistakes in your writing.And you languageReveres horse,I kept going.I worked hard.I checked myability still needs to be improved.He said patiently.“But Ispelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checkedbelieve that youll succeed sooner or later as long as you keepout a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even readmaking great efforts to improve it.He added,giving me a firma few of them.look.From then on,I spared no efforts to enhance my writing.When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughedActually,I fell in love with writing.out loud,and said,“Great.Now,write it again.I wrote it again,该考生的第一段描述作者的作品没有获奖的伤心与失望，and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of并要去问老师自已的作品为什么没有获奖。该考生认为这个winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didnt win,I逻辑没有问题，即做到了逻辑“自洽”。但完全忽略了文章wouldnt care.自身的逻辑，原文最后一段已经很清楚交代作者不在乎输赢，注意：1.续写词数应为1 50 个左右；2 请按如下格式在于是该考生的考场作文与原文的逻辑是相悖的，并且忽视了答题卡的相应位置作答。第二段首句“颁奖典礼”这一重要信息；相应地，该考生的A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there第二段也是不符合原文逻辑。由此可见，在进行续写内容创came the news.造时要先理清原文逻辑，让自己的作品符合逻辑“它洽”。广东教育高中2 0 2 3年第8 期45应考方略英语胜经二、续写内容的完整性续文的完整性是指考生创造的续写内容应包含经过推理得出的所有要点或元素，而不是只包含部分或个别要点或元素。由于考场时间紧迫，考生在审题时往往会漏掉或忽视一些要点，续写内容也往往会因缺乏一些要素而导致得分偏低，如下面一位考生的考场作品：A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there camethe news.As I looked around in the classroom,my classmate,Tom,appeared.When seeing me,he came up to me and held myhand instantly.“Why did you stand here by yourself?Dont youknow you got the first prize?he shouted with excitement.“I thinkI cant be the winner because my writing is not so good.Hearingthis,Tom smiled and whispered,“How proud I am of you!Youmade it!Go and take the prize!It was not long before a glittermedal was in my hand,shining off a bright light.I went to my teachers office afier the award presentation.Icarried the medal in front of me and knocked at my teachers door.At the sight of the medal,the teacher felt a little confused,asking,You won it?“We have done it together.Its a surprise for me.I responded,my face blooming like a flower.“This is the best giftI have ever seen!But it was your efforts that led to your successsaid the teacher excitedly with tears sparkling in his eyes.Heembraced me tightly.At that time,I really knew writing was aprecious treasure which I would love forever.该考生的第一段侧重描写作者得知获奖信息的过程，而漏掉了对颁奖典礼相关信息的描述，也没有提及老师；第二段重点描述告知老师自己获奖，但是漏掉了对老师表示感谢这个重要元素，因此该考生的续文并不完整，缺乏基本要点，很难取得高分。因此，考生要先根据原文以及两个已给的段首句推断出续文应该包含的所有基本要素，在创造续写内容时遵循完整性原则，使得续文含有所有必要元素。三、续写内容的衔接性考生在创造续文时至少要做到三处衔接，即第一段第一句要和第一段已给段首句衔接、第一段最后一句要和第二段已给段首句衔接、第二段第一句要和第二段已给段首句衔接。衔接处自然紧密，续文才能意义连贯、结构清晰，反之亦然。如两位考生的作品，第一位考生作品如下：A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,therecame the news.It seemed like a normal afternoon as usual,when I was immersed in reading another attractive book onPaul Revere.（第一处衔接）I heard that all the students shouldattend an award presentation of the writing contest after class.“Have I won a prize?Will my horse become another hit 248 yearslater?I thought to myself,a bit anxious.Finally came themeeting,at the beginning of which all the other peers were excitedto guess who would be the winner.When hearing my name called,I dashed to the stage.Receiving the medal,I could hardlyconceal my joy.（第二处衔接）I went to my teachers office after the award presentation.“Congratulations!You made it.he held up his thumb with ashining and inspiring smile.（第三处衔接）From then on，Inever doubted about my ability to learn English as a Brazilian.Instead,the experience of the writing contest has urged me to learnmy second language through history and culture,which has broughtbrand new enjoyment to my writing as well as language learning.Never will I forget the brilliant teacher who has activated mypotential with appreciation and encouragement.第二位考生作品如下：A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,therecame the news.Dumfounded,I was told that I won the firstprize.（第一处衔接）So astonished was I that I simply couldntbelieve it as if it were just a dream.No sooner had I been informedof receiving the reward than I knew it was true.My hard workfinally paid off.A surge of happiness as well as excitement ranthrough me.Never was I more cheerful and thrilled when acceptingthe award.Never before had I been so proud of myself when giventhunderous applause and tremendous cheers.Never was I moregrateful to my teacher.（第二处衔接）I went to my teachers office after the award presentation.The moment I saw him,I immediately told him the excitingnews and flung my arms around him,clinging to him,tighterthan ever before.（第三处衔接）“Congratulations！Yo u m a d eit!,said he in an exceedingly delighted voice,laughing outlouder.I expressed my great gratitude to him.Had it not been hisencouragement and inspiration I wouldnt have participated in thewriting competition,let alone win the first prize.Especiallyimportant was that I got a taste for writing that spring,realizing thevalue of persistence and perseverance.Since then,I have neverstopped writing.What a meaningful experience it was!对比两位考生的衔接处（加黑色字体），显然第二位考生的衔接更加自然紧密。第一处衔接最好直接交代“消息”的具体内容，而第一位考生在交代时间和作者此时所做的事情，因此信息不能很好吻合；第二处衔接应提及作者的老师，而第一位考生在描述自己获奖后的喜悦，因此不能启示下文；第三处衔接应描述在老师办公室里见到老师的场景，而第一位考生直接引用老师的话语，信息跨度大，缺乏一定的衔接度。相对比之下，第二位考生的作品的衔接更符合逻辑、更加贴切紧密。综上所述，考生在创造续文时要遵循逻辑“它洽”、完整性以及衔接性的原则，让续写内容符合原文逻辑，包含基本要素，并且过渡自然紧密，与原文浑然一体，融洽度高。【本文系“中小学英语教学研究专项课题“基于深度阅读的高中英语写作任务活动的设计与实施研究”（批准号：CDJY-2022-A-yyb84）以及广东省教育科学研究项目重点课题“高中英语阅读教学中学科能力培养的行动研究”（批准号：2 0 2 3ZQJK119）系列研究成果】责任编辑吴昊雷46广东教育高中2 0 2 3年第8 期